Tzedek “Party Rock” pages 1-10
Okay, here it is, the first ten pages of the second Tzedek story. This will be the last Tzedek story for a while(no, I’m not giving up on it just taking a break). I’ll be writing stories for other ideas that I have and improving on Tzedek as well. Enjoy!
Page 1 (Six panels)
Panel 1 Paramore Neighborhood in Orlando, Florida. It’s a hot humid afternoon in August and the lovebugs are annoyingly landing on everyone and everything in sight. Tzedek’s driving a two door black 2007 Mitsubishi Lancer while trailing a dark green 1998 BMW with tinted windows as it strolls down the street with not a care in the world.
CAP:
Pimps. They’re customers of human trafficers.
CAP:
I’ve been tailing this one three days straight.
Panel 2 At a four way stop the BMW pulls alongside a young lady who’s about sixteen. She’s dressed in an outfit that a woman would wear to ngihtclub. Tzedek has parked behind a yellow bug.
CAP:
Pimp’s name is Ian Vespucci.
CAP:
He’s been charged with rape five times, but each time the charges are always dropped.
Panel 3 With the girl now inside of the car, it drives off with Tzedek following closely behind.
CAP:
He’s got connections with law enforcement.
Panel 4 Ian heads unto the I-4 ramp heading west with Tzedek’s still on his trail.
CAP:
Word on the street is he’s attending a party tonight for crimeworld folks at a private residence in Kissimmee.
Panel 5 Both cars continue to speed down the not too busy highway. Ian’s car is blasting music, the base is booming.
CAP:
Ian’s providing the entertainment.
SFX (Music):
Boom! Boom!
Panel 6 Thirty mintues later, Ian has exited the highway at the Kissimmee exit. He’s stopped at a light and is in the right hand turning lane. Tzedek is two cars behind him.
CAP:
There’s also going to be a surprise for Ian and his customers…
Page 2 (Six panels)
Panel 1 Thirty minutes later, Ian arrives at the private residence which is in the boonies (out in the country). He’s speaking to a security guard at the gate. Tzedek is parked right across the street at a park watching the conversation. Her car faces the bumper of Ian’s.
CAP:
I can’t tell you what it is though, you’ll just have to read the rest of this comic.
Panel 2 As the gates have closed behind the BMW as it drives off, Tzedek has gotten out of her car. She wears a brown ladies trenchcoat over her blue and white spandex costume with blue boots and blue and white gloves. Her black hair with blue streaks is up in a bun.
Panel 3 With her back turned to the gated community, Tzedek begins to walk in the park.
Panel 4 Five minutes later, she has reached the other side of the park and sits at a wooden bench facing the street with her back facing the park as a black limo begins to turn on the street that Tzedek is facing.
Panel 5 Having made its turn the limo begins to turn into the park’s parking lot.
CAP:
Opportunity’s a knocking…
Panel 6 Five minutes later, with the limo parked, the driver has hastily making a run to the park’s restroom as Tzedek follows.
Page 3 (Five Panels)
Panel 1 In the men’s restroom the limo driver has just finished using the toilet and is speedily heading out the door as he tucks in his shirt, as Tzedek has just come inside.
Panel 2 As he finishes fixing his shirt, the limo driver’s attention has shifted to Tzedek who is right in front of him, blocking the door. He has a surprised expression.
LIMO DRIVER:
Miss, this is the men’s—
Panel 3 Panel is black with the words POW!!! in red lettering.
Panel 4 The driver is down and unconscious as Tzedek proceeds to put his uniform on over hers. Her trenchcoat’s on the floor.
Panel 5 Minutes later, now dressed in the limo driver’s outfit, Tzedek leaves the restroom leaving behind the unconscious limo driver now in his underwear and socks handcuffed to a stall
Page 4 (Six panels)
Panel 1 Now back at the limo, Tzedek gets into the driver’s seat.
Panel 2 As Tzedek starts the car up a sultry female voice coming from the back of the limo speaks to Tzedek who answers back mimicking the limo’s driver voice with perfection.
FEMALE VOICE:
What took you so long?
TZEDEK (MIMICKING LIMO DRIVER’S VOICE):
The toilets were all clogged up.
FEMALE VOICE: Now we’re gonna be late. hurry up and drive.
TZEDEK: Yes, maam.
Panel 3 Minutes later, the limo arrives at the pearly gates of the private residence and enters the as the security guard waves to them.
Panel 4 Moments later, the limo has parked on the big round driveway. Ian’s BMW is among the parked cars.
Panel 5 Now out of the limo with a surgeon’s mask on her face, Tzedek heads towards the passenger’s door on the driver’s side to let her female passenger out.
CAP:
I’m not a shape shifter, just a mimicker.
CAP:
Besides, I don’t wanna disappoint my heavy cargo.
Panel 6 With the car door now opened, the inside of the limo is now in viewed. Sitting inside the limo is a heavy set Asian American woman (Amanda Waller meets Lady Bullseye) in a long emerald green dress. Her hair is up in a bun with chopsticks pinning the bun. She wears diamond studded earnings, a necklace and a bracelet on her left arm.
CAP:
Yuka Aoyama aka The Mistress.
CAP:
She’s the kingpin of crime in central Florida.
THE MISTRESS:
Better get a move on hun, the star of this party has arrived!
CAP:
Oh you have no idea.
Page 5 (Six panels)
Panel 1 As The Mistress steps out of the limo, she points to the mask on Tzedek’s face questioning it.
MISTRESS:
What’s with the mask?
TZEDEK (imitating the limo driver’s voice):
I have a cold mistress, I dont’ want you getting sick.
MISTRESS:
Oh..well come on!
Panel 2 The Mistress stands tapping her feet impatiently to the right of Tzedek who is closing the door.
Panel 3 Tzedek leads the way as they walk down the brick pathway to the door.
Panel 4 The door is guarded by two men who look like MIB agents as seen by Tzedek but in reality are dressed in blue suits with dark sunglasses and blue suade shoes.
MISTRESS:
Afternoon gentlemen.
GUARDS:
Afternoon Mistress.
Panel 5 The guards have opened the doors and as Tzedek and the Mistress enter, they’re greeted by a man dressed in a tailored black suit (Alfred meets Tim Gunn)who kisses the Mistress’ hands.
MAN (As he kisses the mistress’ hands):
Welcome Mistress.
MISTRESS:
Thank you Benji.
Panel 6 Now in the hallway a waiter holding a tray with three glasses of champange has joined the trio. The hallway is large and there are expenisve artwork and sculptors aligning both sides of it. Benji stands in front of the group while Tzedek is at the end with the Mistress’ back facing her. The Mistress and Benji have their glasses in their hands as Tzedek turns down the her glass that the waiter is about to hand her.
MISTRESS:
Has everyone arrived?
BENJI:
Yes, Mistress. Everyone is here along with the…entertainment.
MISTRESS:
Good, well let’s started shall we?
CAP:
Yes, lets.
Page 6 (Six panels)
Panel 1 Moments later, Benji leads the Mistress and Tzedek into the foyer where all the guests are waiting eagerly for the guest of honor to arrive.
BENJI:
The guests are very excited about this celebration, Mistress.
MISTRESS:
Ah yes, it’s been a profitable year.
CAP:
She’s right. Crime syndicates around Central Florida have become more rich and powerful because of her.
Panel 2 Tzedek stays behind at the entrance of the foyer and looks on as Benji and the Mistress enter the huge foyer, the guests begin to clap and cheer for the Mistress as they stand around their round tables.
CAP:
But today there’s gonna be a windfall.
Panel 3 The panel is divided into four sections that focus in on some of the guests in the crowd as they clap and cheer for the Mistress. The first section shows Ian with the young girl at his side. The next section shows a black woman. The third panel shows a white man and the last section shows a white woman. Each section gets a caption.
CAP:
Pimps.
CAP:
Professional Thieves.
CAP:
Druglords.
CAP:
Weapon Smugglers.
Panel 4 With her hand up, the Mistress motions the crowd to stop clapping as they start to sit down their tables.
CAP:
All benaficiaries of the crime wave that’s gripped Central Florida.
Panel 5 With guests now seated, the waiters begin to hand out glasses of champange as the Mistress begins to make a speech while standing at her square table in front of the guests. Tzedek continues to look on from the entrance.
MISTRESS (3 balloons joined together):
I want to welcome everyone to this celebration, we’ve had a great year—
MISTRESS:
—which wouldn’t have been possible without all of your hard work.—
MISTRESS:
You all should be very proud.
SFX (guests Clapping):
Panel 6 Everyone’s glasses are raised as the Mistress gives a toast while no one notices Tzedek sneaking away from the foyer.
MISTRESS:
A toast to all of us! May next year be even better than this one!
CAP:
And that’s my cue.
Page 7 (Six panels)
Panel 1 While the Mistress and her enjoy their dinner, Tzedek has made her way upstairs heading towards two guards standing in front of the master bedroom. Their backs are turned as they conversate.
Panel 2 Tzedek quickly takes them out by banging their heads together.
TZEDEK:
Break time fellas.
SFX(heads banging together):
Smack!
GUARDS(groaning):
Oof!
Panel 3 Tzedek steps over the unconscious guards as she opens the bedroom door.
Panel 4 Entering the room, Tzedek notices a closet door that’s slightly ajar.
Panel 5 A moment later, Tzedek begins to open the door.
Panel 6 The open door reveals nice clothes and shoes, four Louis Voitton suitcases, and ten call girls (ages fifteen to eighteen all different races/ethnicities) sitting in two rows handcuffed together. Among them is the girl that got into Ian’s car. They stare at Tzedek in fright.
Page 8 (Seven panels)
Panel 1 Mintues later, with the girls now freed, Tzedek motions for them to keep quiet as she begins to ask them questions.
TZEDEK (Whispering):
Is everyone alright?—
GIRLS:
Yes.
TZEDEK:
—Are there anymore girls in the other closet?
Panel 2 Girl #1 points to the other closet opposite the group.
GIRL #1:
No. They put some stuff inside-I don’t know what exactly but it sounded important.
Panel 3 A moment later, Tzedek has opened the closet to reveal explosives, weapons, cash, and two jump drives.
CAP:
Ooh, party favors!
Panel 4 Tzedek then instructs the girls to help her pack up the ‘party favors’ into the Louis Voitton suitcases that were in the same closet that the girls were in.
TZEDEK:
Let’s get this stuff packed up, and then we’re out of here.
Panel 5 Minutes later, the group is all packed and ready to go.
TZEDEK :
Alright let’s hit it!
Panel 6 Moments later, Tzedek and the girls head down the stairs smiling.
Panel 7 Flashback to the masterbedroom where inside the two guards still unconscious, are handcuffed with their mouths tapped shut.
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Page 9 (Six panels)
Panel 1 Now downstairs, Tzedek escorts the group outside to the limo. The path however, is blocked by the two ‘MIB Agents’.
Guard #1: Hold it, where are you taking them?—
TZEDEK:
Agent J, Mr. Vespucci wants the ladies move to another location for a special guest.
Panel 2 The guards look at Tzedek suspiciously. Guard #1 reaches for his walkie talkie to contact Ian.
GUARD #2:
He didn’t confirm that with us.
GUARD #1 (Grabbing his walkie talkie):
Yeah, we’ll have to ask him…
Panel 3 Tzedek attacks the guards as the girls run to the limo.
Tzedek (Belting guard #1): That won’t be necessary.—
SFX(Guard #1 grabbing his stomach as he’s bent over in pain): Ooh.
Tzedek: Girls, get to the limo!
Guard #2: Hey!
Panel 4 As the girls quickly enter the limo, Tzedek continues to fight the two guards. Using her exceptional martial arts skill (she’s fighting like Spike from Cowboy Bebop), Tzedek quickly breaks the leg of guard #2.
SFX(leg breaking):
Crack.
GUARD #2:
AAAAh!
Panel 5 The girls are now in the limo watching the fight. Guard #1 who has recovered and swings at Tzedek who agily dodges it.
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Panel 6 Tzedek then does the heart exploding technique on guard #1 (similar to the one in Kill Bill but not exactly)’s chest. Guard #1 is taken aback by this.
GUARD #1:
What did you do to me?
TZEDEK:
You’ll see in thirty seconds.
GUARD #2(OFF PANEL):
Aaah!
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Page 10 (Three panels)
Panel 1 Guard #2 has lounged at Tzedek who breaks his neck. As guard #1 staggers towards Tzedek as he grasps his chest and starts falling to the ground.
CAP:
Master Ip Chan’s Heart Exploding Technique…works everytime.
Panel 2 Moments later, Tzedek is standing by the bushes with the walkie talkie in her hand as she mimics guard #1’s voice. One of the guards legs slightly sticks out from the bushes.
TZEDEK (Mimicking Guard #1’s voice):
All Quiet on the Western front.
SFX (man’s voice from the walkie talkie):
Huh? Oh right, copy that.
Panel 3 Minutes later, Tzedek-now in the limo-and the girls drive away from the private residence.
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